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1Finished The Dark Stars on Sat May 13, 2017 9:40 pm



Clan Name: Dark Star
Clan element/'s: Void
Special characteristics/traits:
Those of the Dark Stars are easily recognizable due to their inherent nature. Each member of the clan has at least one telling mark of the Dark Star’s influence. These can vary from having eyes that appear to have sparkling stars within, to midnight black
skin like the vastness of space.
Location: Scattered

Bloodline Name: The Corruptant
Bloodline Ability:
The Corruptant Bloodline is focused
on the lost aspects of the original Corruptants, whose powers were so great that they could swallow entire worlds with a motion. While modern day Corruptants are nowhere near such a level and never will approach it, they maintain abilities based around the
Corruptants original purpose, to absorb matter and feed it to their dark master.

All Corruptants are required to
take Chakra Absorption as their first Special Characteristic. In addition they must take the malady Dark Star’s Whispers alongside the two clan SC’s. Alongside this, at character creation they must specify which Corruptant’s essence has bonded to them. While
this does not grant any extra bonuses, it does affect things such as character development and Dark Star related special characteristics.

In accordance with the Dark Star SC’s, all Dark Stars are born with the ability to use void release. In essence, void release is a chakra who’s very nature is meant to break down chakra into absorbable energy. However, this does have it’s own set of limitations. Void Release has no natural advantage save for use against generic techniques which use no element, in which it would be treated as though it were an advantageous element. While being treated normally by base elements such as Earth, Lighting or Fire, when encountering any advanced element Void Release finds itself at a disadvantage due to the complexity of the element. It should also be noted that if any absorption technique is attempted on an non element or basic element technique without already having an existing gap of 50 power the technique will simply fail to work, unable to break it down.



When going up against any advanced element Void Release is treated as though it were at a standard disadvantage. Storm, Ice, Dust, as long as they are not the base five they fall underneath this blanket. Due to this, it should also be noted that if any absorption technique is attempted on an advanced element technique without already having an existing gap of 100 power the technique will simply fail to work, unable to break it down.

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Ex. A 200 power absorption technique could not stop a 200 power Lava technique, but a 300 one could.

In addition, if a technique is being empowered by or simply attempting to straight out absorb unique chakras (Peacock, Tailed Beast, Ryuzetsu) it will be treated as though attempting to absorb advanced element chakra and if absorbed will be converted into normal chakra.

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Yes, that means you can't assault you neighborhood jinchuriki for more power. You savage.

When absorbing chakra through Void Release, the energy is sent back to the user to sustain themselves. However, there is a solid limit of half and half, on this. What this means is that only half of the action cost of the technique is absorbed. The rest is lost, either scattered in the atmosphere or devoured by the Dark Star.

Example:
ex: The absorption of a 30 cost fireball would give 15 cost back to the user, with 15 being lost.



It should also be noted that Void Release cannot be used for things such as teleportation. That space portal may sound pretty, but if we’re honest? It doesn’t how much you look like a galaxy, the only place that's going to leave you is drained of all chakra, your body scattered across the universe.

Tl;dr: Void Release can’t be used for teleportation or making portals. Just don’t.

Thesh (large image):
Thresh is the most sadistic and appears as a skeletal horned man with a floating head, delighting in others suffering.

Varus (large image):
Varus is the most vengeful, appearing as a muscular man with a head similar to Thresh, encouraging fights and exacting ones own justice.

Orianna:
Orianna is the most calculated, Seeming to be a woman made from stars and clockwork, observing the inner working of other things before swallowing them whole.

Kha'Zix:
Kha'Zix hungers the most, as an insect with mantis claws and giant insectile wings, enjoying wholesale slaughter.

Their abilities go as follows.

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Special Characteristic:
Body of the Corruptant
Tier: Tier I
Type: Physical
Description: Every Dark
Star has an alternate form meant to show which Corruptant they have bonded to. The alternate form varies upon each Dark Star, four variations being possible due to the four Corruptants. In essence, they become scaled down versions of each although the only
natural advantages they gain through this are things such as the horns of Thresh for ramming or Kha’Zix’s claws for slashing at enemies. They may also choose to make a partial manifestation of their Dark Star form, although this is not recommended simply due
to issues like having one’s head separated from their body or being unable to fit only their arms through a door due to it being too large.

It should be noted that this is
mostly cosmetic and for character development, as the Corruptant chosen influences things such as Dark Star’s Whisper’s SC tree and the character’s person as a whole.
Word Count Requirement:
begin with at creation for Dark Star clan

Special Characteristic:
Void Ninjutsu
Tier: Tier I
Type: Ninjutsu
Description: Void Ninjutsu
is a special type of chakra used by the Dark Star clan. It’s powers are based on consuming things around it in order to drain the vitality of others. At this stage the user is able to use Void Ninjutsu.
Word Count Requirement:
Begin with at creation for Dark Star clan

Special Characteristic:
Void Ninjutsu
Tier: Tier II
Type: Ninjutsu
Description: Void Ninjutsu
is a special type of chakra used by the Dark Star clan. It’s powers are based on consuming things around it in order to drain the vitality of others. Now the user receives a 20% discount on Void Ninjutsu techniques if they also are at Adept level in the specialty it falls under.
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1200 words

Special Characteristic:
Void Ninjutsu
Tier: Tier III
Type: Ninjutsu
Description: Void Ninjutsu
is a special type of chakra used by the Dark Star clan. It’s powers are based on consuming things around it in order to drain the vitality of others. The user receives a 30% discount on Void Ninjutsu Techniques if they are also at Master level in the specialty it falls under.
Word Count Requirement:
2000 words

It should be noted that Void Ninjutsu
is a ninjutsu branch focusing on the manipulation of the darkness of space. While it is a very versatile element, being usable for both offense and defense, often times the user will find that their Corruptant will influence them in how they use it, aggressive
Corruptants like Thresh will encourage it’s use towards offense while those such as Orianna will move towards a more versatile moveset.

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Special Characteristic:
Dark Star’s Whispers
Tier: Tier I
Type: Malady
Description: All Dark Stars upon birth are cursed with the additional presence of the shattered soul of the original Corruptants in exchange for their powers. At this stage, which is of the lowest tier, the whisper’s in the affected person’s head are small. The general message of these whispers depend on the soul of which Corruptant has been fused with them, but they all generally promote the mass consumption of energy to feed the Dark Star. Despite this at this level it is very easy to resist their cries, only when one reaches below 10% lifeforce the Corruptant’s psyche will forcibly take over the inflicted, attacking all within sight in order to feed their dark master. Note that lifeforce does not drop naturally from this malady, this will only occur if it has been drained due to outside influences. Dark Star’s Whispers only effects the Dark Star clan member, as the voice is inside their head and not a physical manifestation.
Word Count Requirement:
Begin at creation for Dark Star Clan


Special Characteristic:
Dark Star’s Speech
Tier: Tier II
Type: Malady
Description: All Dark Stars
upon birth are cursed with the additional presence of the shattered soul of the original Corruptants in exchange for their powers. At this stage, which is of the middle tier, the whisper’s in the affected person’s head are growing louder. The general message
of these whispers depend on the soul of which Corruptant has been fused with them, but they all generally promote the mass consumption of energy to feed the Dark Star. The whispers have ceased and now the Corruptant begins to speak aloud into their mind, influencing their thoughts and actions. Often their sleep is plagued by fitful nightmares when they do not sate the Corruptants desires. It becomes harder to resist their cries, when one reaches below 25% lifeforce the Corruptant’s psyche will forcibly take over the inflicted,
attacking all within sight in order to feed their dark master. Note that lifeforce does not drop naturally from this malady, this will only occur if it has been drained due to outside influences. Dark Star’s Whispers only effects the Dark Star clan member, as the voice is inside their head and not a physical manifestation. In addition, this begins to cripple their body, causing a -30 power towards any technique not of the Void Element.
Word Count Requirement:
1200 words


Special Characteristic:
Dark Star’s Roar
Tier:Tier III
Type: Malady
Description: All Dark Stars
upon birth are cursed with the additional presence of the shattered soul of the original Corruptants in exchange for their powers. At this stage, which is of the highest tier, the whisper’s in the affected person’s head have reached their loudest. The general message of these whispers depend on the soul of which Corruptant has been fused with them, but they all generally promote the mass consumption of energy to feed the Dark Star. All subtleties have ceased and now the Corruptant never stops issuing commands into
their mind, dictating their thoughts and actions. Often their sleep is plagued by fitful nightmares when they do not sate the Corruptants desires. It will likely become necessary for the afflicted to leave a village if they are part of one, as the Corruptant
psyche will demand the sacrifice of other living beings for the Dark Star. It becomes harder to resist their cries, when one reaches below 40% lifeforce the Corruptant’s psyche will forcibly take over the inflicted, attacking all within sight in order to feed
their dark master. Note that lifeforce does not drop naturally from this malady, this will only occur if it has been drained due to outside influences. Dark Star’s Whispers only effects the Dark Star clan member, as the voice is inside their head and not a physical manifestation. In addition this cripples their body, causing a -50 towards power on all non Void Element techniques.
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2000 words


Secret Clan Jutsu:
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||Name||: Void Release:
Ball
||Classification||: Ninjutsu
||Rank||: E
||Cost||: 6
||Upkeep||: 1
||Nature||: Void
||Class||: Supplementary
||Range||: 5m
||Hand Seals||: half tiger
||Speed||: 100
||Power||: 0
||Description||: The user
forms the sign of the half tiger before drawing ambient void chakra. This then forms a sphere of void chakra within one meter around them. This ball mostly acts as an inert ball of void natured chakra, and can actually be handled by other people without any
adverse effects. While normally this technique has no offensive capabilities and is mostly used just to study void ninjutsu, if other Void techniques are applied to it the Ball can be used as a conduit, travelling the distance of the technique and applying
the effects.

While in this state it simply passes through others, it
is quite cold to the touch.

||Name||: Void Release:
Starlight
||Classification||: Ninjutsu
||Rank||: E
||Cost||: 1
||Upkeep||: 1
||Nature||: Void
||Class||: Supplementary
||Range||: self
||Hand Seals||: Dog
||Speed||: 0
||Power||: 40
||Description||: The user
forms the sign of the dog before channeling void chakra through their skin. The light of the Dark Star forms from within them, causing their skin to take on the characteristics of their Corruptant if they weren’t already in their Dark Star form, glowing with
a purple light similar to an ultraviolet one.



||Name||: Void Release:
Void Camouflage
||Classification||: Ninjutsu
||Rank||: B
||Cost||: 27
||Upkeep||: 14
||Nature||: Void
||Class||: Supplementary
||Range||: 1m from self
||Hand Seals||: Ram
||Speed||: 0
||Power||: 399
||Description||: The user
cloaks themselves in void chakra, making them appear as though they were a dark smudge that is difficult to see. During the duration of this technique the user gains a +50 towards the speed stat. This technique can be blown away if a techniques with equal
or higher power is launched towards it, forcing the technique to end.

||Name||: Void Release:
Lesser Absorption
||Classification||: Ninjutsu
||Rank||: C
||Cost||: 20
||Upkeep||: 10
||Nature||: Void
||Class||: Defensive/Counteroffensive
||Range||: 5m
||Hand Seals||: Ram
||Speed||: 147
||Power||: 148
||Description||: The user
creates a ball from Void chakra 3m in diameter and manipulates it around them to absorb incoming attacks. Each of these balls have a set amount of chakra they can absorb, denoted by their power. Upon absorbing a technique, they lose that amount of power. If
they absorb a technique with lesser power than the remaining of the technique then the other jutsu is dispelled while Lesser Absorption remaining with its power remaining being the base minus the opposing techniques power. Upon encountering a technique with
the same power as itself, or one that has more, it will siphon the amount of power the technique has left remaining, causing it to do lessened damage. This cannot be used on taijutsu techniques as it is not meant to be used on living beings. the user can only create one ball per instance of this technique.

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tl;dr: The user creates a ball that upon contact with a technique, it disintegrates it in exchange for getting smaller. (A ball getting hit by a fireball would see the fireball getting smaller, eventually fading away if it is less powerful)

||Name||: Void Release:
Absorption
||Classification||: Ninjutsu
||Rank||: B
||Cost||: 27
||Upkeep||: 13
||Nature||: Void
||Class||: Defensive/Counteroffensive
||Range||: 15m
||Hand Seals||: Ram-> dog
||Speed||: 192
||Power||: 193
||Description||: The user
creates a ball from Void chakra 5m in diameter and manipulates it around them to absorb incoming attacks. Each of these balls have a set amount of chakra they can absorb, denoted by their power. Upon absorbing a technique, they lose that amount of power. If
they absorb a technique with lesser power than the remaining of the technique then the other jutsu is dispelled while Absorption remaining with its power remaining being the base minus the opposing techniques power. Upon encountering a technique with the same
power as itself, or one that has more, it will siphon the amount of power the technique has left remaining, causing it to do lessened damage. This cannot be used on taijutsu techniques as it is not meant to be used on living beings. This technique can only
be learned after first learning Void Release: Lesser Absorption.

the user can only create one ball per instance of this technique.


Spoiler:
tl;dr: The user creates a ball that upon contact with a technique, it disintegrates it in exchange for getting smaller. (A ball getting hit by a fireball would see the fireball getting smaller, eventually fading away if it is less powerful). But bigger.

||Name||: Void Release:
Greater Absorption
||Classification||: Ninjutsu
||Rank||: A
||Cost||: 34
||Upkeep||: 17
||Nature||: Void
||Class||: Defensive/Counteroffensive
||Range||: 30m
||Hand Seals||: Ram -> dog
-> sheep
||Speed||: 235
||Power||: 235
||Description||: The user
creates a ball from Void chakra 7m in diameter and manipulates it around them to absorb incoming attacks. Each of these balls have a set amount of chakra they can absorb, denoted by their power. Upon absorbing a technique, they lose that amount of power. If
they absorb a technique with lesser power than the remaining of the technique then the other jutsu is dispelled while Absorption remaining with its power remaining being the base minus the opposing techniques power. Upon encountering a technique with the same
power as itself, or one that has more, it will siphon the amount of power the technique has left remaining, causing it to do lessened damage. This cannot be used on taijutsu techniques as it is not meant to be used on living beings. This technique can only
be learned after first learning Void Release: Absorption.

the user can only create one ball per instance of this technique.


Spoiler:
tl;dr: The user creates a ball that upon contact with a technique, it disintegrates it in exchange for getting smaller. (A ball getting hit by a fireball would see the fireball getting smaller, eventually fading away if it is less powerful). But even bigger.

||Name||: Void Release:
Focused Reality
||Classification||: Ninjutsu
||Rank||: S
||Cost||: 45
||Upkeep||: 22
||Nature||: Void
||Class||: Defensive/Counteroffensive
||Range||: 30m
||Hand Seals||: Ram -> dog
-> sheep -> horse
||Speed||: 270
||Power||: 300
||Description||: The user
creates a ball from Void chakra 10m in diameter and manipulates it above them 30m in the air to absorb incoming attacks. While this ball stays in place, it has a dragging force equal to its power to all chakra constructs in the area. This does not differentiate
between friend or foe, so the user must be careful not to hinder allies with it. This ball has a set amount of chakra it can absorb, denoted by its power. Upon absorbing a technique, it loses that amount of power. If they absorb a technique with lesser power
than the remaining of the technique then the other jutsu is dispelled while Absorption remaining with its power remaining being the base minus the opposing techniques power. Upon encountering a technique with the same power as itself, or one that has more,
it will siphon the amount of power the technique has left remaining, causing it to do lessened damage. Upon reaching zero power the technique explodes violently in a bright light with it’s original base power, causing damage to its surroundings in a 10m radius.
This cannot be used on taijutsu techniques as it is not meant to be used on living beings. This technique can only be learned after first learning Void Release: Greater Absorption.

the user can only create one ball per instance of this technique.

Spoiler:
tl;dr: The user creates a ball that upon contact with a technique, it disintegrates it in exchange for getting smaller. (A ball getting hit by a fireball would see the fireball getting smaller, eventually fading away if it is less powerful) But biggest've'ly'ain'tve.






Clan History: During an
untold age, in a galaxy far away from ours, there was an entity. This Entity was known as the Dark Star. Coming into existence as a large black sphere with insatiable hunger. Immediately this star began to consume anything around it, from space dust to asteroids.
Then, when it had gained enough power, it had made the Corruptants.

The Corruptants, giant beings of
immense power, were created as tools for the Dark Star. They, using the qualities obtained from the elements they were created from, were to go out into the vast reaches of the universe to find more materials for the Dark Star to eat and consume.

Thousands of years passed, countless
universes devoured. The number of Corruptants grew endless. It became almost certain that the Dark Star would consume all. Suddenly, a flash of light. Throughout the cosmos, the Corruptants began to fall apart. Some imploded into themselves, others defeated
by other ancient Titans. Soon the Dark Star was left weak and frail, unable to grow no longer without a stable source of energy. For untold millennia, it slept.

However, this time it spent was
not in pure waste. In its slumber, the Dark Star reached out across the cosmos, gathering the soul fragments of its most powerful and loyal Corruptants. Thresh, Varus, Orianna and Kha’Zix, they had been named. While he could not restore them to their former
glory, he knew what could. Sending their precious few remaining pieces of soul towards a planet with a high energy rating, it waited for its plan to take effect.

Upon arrival at this planet, the
souls dispersed into the atmosphere which was ambient with a natural energy. This planet was that of the world of shinobi in its dawning era, these souls appearing just as it was introduced to the common man. Seeking out those they deemed with potential they
melded their life force into them and waited.

Many went mad from the fusion.
Others saw it happening and found ways to prevent it. Nevertheless, in time they had managed to esentially create a new species. These Corruptants were far weaker than the originals, likely due to their inferior human qualities, but they could still absorb
energy just as the Dark Star intended.

While those newly formed Corruptants
were aware that they had a unique power that nobody else on the planet had, they also recognized its dangers. In the waking of the night, demonic whispers from a far off world whispered promises into their ears, ones of power in exchange for servitude. Consume
in the name of the Dark Star and eternal reward would be theirs. Some inevitably went mad, joining the side of the Dark Star and wielding their unique Chakra to consume all energy they can, while others practice restraint and instead tried to learn more about
themselves and how to eventually terminate the Dark Stars for good. These two sides would constantly war over ideological belief, causing many members to die off and the clan to spread across the world to avoid further conflict.

Even still the Corruptant’s souls
travel the earth, seeking newly born souls that have the potential to become an asset to the Dark Star and binding to them, creating new Corruptants to replace those who died in what they perceive as petty squabbles. To this day they whisper darkly into
the ears of the tired and weary, seeking to meld new weapons for their Dark master.

Members: Unlimited



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2Finished Re: The Dark Stars on Tue May 16, 2017 2:38 am

All finished!

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3Finished Re: The Dark Stars on Wed May 17, 2017 6:10 pm

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Hello there and welcome. Thank ye for creating this clan. Just need some clarity on a few things.

A) I'm trying not to focus on the word "Void" too much, as it suggests other things here. Matter is a pretty broad range her, not to mention its theme of being able to absorb things. I'm gonna go out on a limb and say your absorbing, all the basic elements, advanced ones, and whatever else. If that's the case, then I am going to say no. Cool concept and all, however, this clan's capabilities can be pretty broad. So I will ask for some clear limitations as it were. Not only limitations, but also weaknesses. This special Chakra seems to have none when going up against other things.

B) Special Characteristics for Void Jutsus. The discount should be based upon your Ninjutsu level capabilities. Actually, I will meet you half way and lets see, if you're adept user, you can have a master level discount. This only goes for Void techs. Obviously, if ya dont meet the required skill level, then one cannot use Jutsus of a certain level. The consumption portion will need to be addressed also please. The level of absorption and its capabilities.

C)
It should be noted that Void Ninjutsu
is a ninjutsu branch focusing on the manipulation of the darkness of space. While it is a very versatile element, being usable for both offense and defense, often times the user will find that their Corruptant will influence them in how they use it, aggressive
Corruptants like Thresh will encourage it’s use towards offense while those such as Orianna will move towards a more versatile moveset.

Do note that we will not be accepting Jutsus or abilities that allows one to open up portals and the like. I am mentioning this now due to the potential that it holds.

D) Star's Whispers, Speech and Roar SC: could you clarify who is being affected here? Are we talking the person using the Void release or the opponent? And what needs to happen for either parties life force to be affected?

We will move onto jutsus afterwards.




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4Finished Re: The Dark Stars on Sat May 20, 2017 8:06 am

I believe that I addressed all points. Please do correct me if I'm wrong, I tend to miss things when importing from Drive to the site.

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5Finished Re: The Dark Stars on Fri May 26, 2017 1:41 am

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A little bit better, but I still have concerns lol. I will try to make this as painless as possible. So do be patient with me here.

1. Now then. It seems we have a ratio to power and absorption. I like that. And I think it should be for all things. The plus 100 power for advanced elements is a good start. However, we need something like that for base level stuff. Whether or not its elemental or non elemental. If it exceeds one absorption capabilities. Then it should follow the same kind of rules.

2. Keep in mind that there are various kinds of Chakra out there. Sage Chakra, Peacock, Bijuu, Beasts etc. Their Chakra signatures are all different. I don't expect ya implying that you can absorb all those other Chakra types too? Like I said above, absorption is a very broad ability. As such it needs its limits, especially since matter comes in various forms.

3. What happens to the Chakra when it gets absorbed? o.O Please shed some light on this.


4. The Malady and whispers etc seems a bit more on the side of plot. As opposed to a real disadvantages. Since what are the chances of lowering your LF that much? Unlikely, as such, I feel the corrupt nature of the Malady needs a more purpose built feature. In any case lets get this sorted. I will communicate with you any other concerns. I dislike drawn out app checking, it gets exhausting for both parties.


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6Finished Re: The Dark Stars on Thu Jun 01, 2017 2:22 am

Hope I got everything fixed. Don't worry about the whole process, I do appreciate the input on my work.

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7Finished Re: The Dark Stars on Sun Jun 04, 2017 4:47 pm

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1. Looks better. May revisit some stuff in the future.

Lets look at Jutsus for a moment.

-Void Release:Void Camouflage→Lets put a duration on this please. Its technically classed as self enhancing. Please also increase the upkeep to 14 Chakra.

- Void Release: Lesser Absorption→Have utterly confused me here XD. A few things though. Please increase the upkeep cost to about 10. Add a limit to the number of balls created. Also, please explain and add a bit more clarity to the jutsu itself. Are we absorbing something, but if its lesser power your jutsu gets dispelled? A little confused by it.

The jutsus in relations to it must also follow the same principles. In general, try to have it so upkeep cost is half the amount of the original cost please. Good way to balance it all.


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8Finished Re: The Dark Stars on Thu Jun 08, 2017 4:54 am

should be all set.

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9Finished Re: The Dark Stars on Tue Jun 27, 2017 3:55 am

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Hmm.

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